2º Reflection
Jessica Villasenor
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I have written the four annotations,
thus, it is time to make an evaluation of the compiled information. First at
all, I have to mention that I am very satisfied with the improvement in two
previous annotations and the achievement of the goals I set.
After writing my first reflection I set two targets. The first was to shorten the topic and the
second one was to avoid technical words, such as political terms.
Referring to the first goal, I consider it achieved. I wrote more accurately and my classmates did not have problems to identify the issue I was
depicting. During peer comments our team
made the most of the time, there were not many questions or doubts about the
delimitation of the topic. At the very beginning of the fourth annotation there
was difficulty to connect the topic to the statistics in a short paragraph. I did not refresh their minds and there were
many questions questions about
the relation of the crisis of identity and the statistics of harassment and
usage of veil I was giving in the annotation. Fortunately, I could answers the
doubts and modified he first part of the text.
The second goal was achieved as well. I had no necessity to write down
definitions or concepts anymore because I did not include them in my
explanation. I am not sure whether I changed my writing style or not, but
definitively I did simplified it.
Perhaps it was because the previous annotations help classmates
understand the whole context and they had already good references.
I will use the information in the first two
annotations to give a general context of the woman situation in Egypt and the
last two to go deeper in the explanation and the support of my argument.I am very interested in the evolution this situation could have in the coming years. It is worth to see
how women’s customs change at the same time that political situation does.
When people have passion about his/her subject of study, the research
becomes a crusade for the best information. Only with the best of the best we will be able to
satisfy our thirsty for knowledge. I hope the combination of the whole
information for the final paper is successful. I had problems in writing coherently and this research help me improve
my reasoning skills. This work gave the opportunity to explore the method to
writing well. I will be a better and concise writer in the future :) .
I feel confused about the two goals--(1) to shorten the topic, and (2) to avoid technical terms. I thought in the teacher-student conferences, the suggestions from your group members and me were as follows: First, to "clarify" your topic. You seemed to have two issues in these annotations, and you need to decide which one should be the real issue. Second, to define the different terms. Since some contexts (social, cultural, and political situations) in Egypt are foreign to students in Taiwan or even you. We need clear sources and explanations to judge information included in your text. Have you achieved these two goals in your final paper?
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