1º Reflection

1º Reflection

PROBLEMS TO EXPLAIN MY ISSUE. BROAD TOPIC AND TECHNICAL LANGUAGE

Jessica Villasenor

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I had problems to identify the main issue within the phenomena I chose. I was explaining the incongruence between the Egyptian government and the society of that country. I have written two annotations already and I can realize that society is a very complex subject of study, that’s why I have decided to shorten the topic. 

After the last peer feedback I noticed my topic was not properly explained because I wanted to give many details.  The example I chose to explain the phenomena –women using veil in Egypt- required many space to depict it clearly. My classmates believed that “women using the veil” was the main issue in my research, but actually I pretended it to be only an example to prove the incongruence and my argument. After considering this problematic, I have decided to talk only about the example of women in order to make it my main issue from now on. There are two reasons for that; first, my classmates seemed to be more interested in that aspect of my research and by the other hand, talking about the incongruence of the society and the government was a hard topic for everybody to understand in just a few words. Thus, I expect my next annotation to be clearer and shorter.

I want to adequate the structure of my research to make it more digestible. I know most of my classmates don’t have the same academic training in politics than I have. It would be good to write about the general political situation in Egypt in my next annotation, so they can have a complete understanding. Peer’s comments have helped me to clarify my explanation and to learn that each audience may require different style of writing.

I also realized that I should write more definitions of the technical words I use because during the feedback those kinds of words are always recurrent questions. For the concepts, I will try to choose the simplest ones or interpret them before and then write them down and cite the author; I can use my words to explain the meaning to my classmates in the annotation in order to save time.

The main problem for these goals seems to be the 500 words limitation. However, there are two more annotations to be done and with the reduction of my subject of study I will do a better job for sure.