Peers' comments 2 annotation

April

In this annotation, you talk about "the crisis of identity" but I did not see how it is linked to veil. I did read, and at first moment, I do not understand your writing. I think that your writing was about "veil”.

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You should mention more about “crisis of identity”, how it happens. You can give more space to explain [the fragmentation and contradiction]. On your annotation, you named its names, but did not give us its details. I feel that, you supposed that we knew something about Egypt, but we actually have an empty mind about that. Could you write for us, the people who totally don't know anything about Egypt?

Jessica's response

My main topic actually is the incongruence between society and government. In the first annotation I talked about veil as an example of these contradictions, but now I want to introduce you all to the main problematic in my research. I will write an introduction to make this point clearer. ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------

劉孟欣

I have the same feeling that April’s. I don’t understand. Maybe it's because we don't really know about the politics in Egypt.

You talk about a crisis of identity; can you make a connection between the Crisis of identity and your argument? I can’t understand what your point about this is. This is a hard topic; you should mention more about it write more explicitly about the connection. It's is important for us to understand.

Jessica's response

The connection is because I think the crisis of identity is consequence of the pro-western governments. I will re write it in order to be more explicit.
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蔡詠歡

Do you mean the society is being parted into two parts? The conventional group and the group that wants to go western?

Jessica's response

Not necessarily to parts, but yes, it's fragmented. Some of them are looking at the West for solutions.
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Astrid Chuang

The shift of authorities begins the changing of moral values. I think the writing is pretty good, but still needs more explanation. This kind of topic requires some basic knowledge of those issues.

Jessica's response

Yes, just as you said it. It is because the previous governments that the society is facing troubles, even though some people in Egypt is already used to the western customs. I will do my best to give a clearer explanation.