2º Reflection

2º Reflection

Jessica Villasenor

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 I have written the four annotations, thus, it is time to make an evaluation of the compiled information. First at all, I have to mention that I am very satisfied with the improvement in two previous annotations and the achievement of the goals I set.

After writing my first reflection I set two targets.  The first was to shorten the topic and the second one was to avoid technical words, such as political terms. 

Referring to the first goal, I consider it achieved. I wrote more accurately and my classmates did not have problems to identify the issue I was depicting.  During peer comments our team made the most of the time, there were not many questions or doubts about the delimitation of the topic. At the very beginning of the fourth annotation there was difficulty to connect the topic to the statistics in a short paragraph. I did not refresh their minds and there were many questions questions about the relation of the crisis of identity and the statistics of harassment and usage of veil I was giving in the annotation. Fortunately, I could answers the doubts and modified he first part of the text.

The second goal was achieved as well. I had no necessity to write down definitions or concepts anymore because I did not include them in my explanation. I am not sure whether I changed my writing style or not, but definitively I did simplified it.  Perhaps it was because the previous annotations help classmates understand the whole context and they had already good references. 

  I will use the information in the first two annotations to give a general context of the woman situation in Egypt and the last two to go deeper in the explanation and the support of my argument.I am very interested in the evolution this situation could have in the coming years. It is worth to see how women’s customs change at the same time that political situation does.

When people have passion about his/her subject of study, the research becomes a crusade for the best information.  Only  with the best of the best we will be able to satisfy our thirsty for knowledge. I hope the combination of the whole information for the final paper is successful. I had problems in writing coherently and this research help me improve my reasoning skills. This work gave the opportunity to explore the method to writing well. I will be a better and concise writer in the future :) .

4 annotation. Peer comment.

Peers comment 4 annotation

 Jesica Villasenor

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April

 I like the title. I think “veil against harassment” is only an excuse for the religious people to wear the veil. I remember you wrote about crisis of identity, I don’t understand. You can check the spelling again.

Response

Thank you. I dint write about it, I just cited that some religions may think that it can help women to be safer but the point is that is not an effective measure. I will revise the whole spelling.

Ariel

" but it only confirms that the problems is deeper that what we think and the solution for this crisis of identity can only be reached through long terms restructuring society programs. "
Powerful.

Response
Thank you.

Evelyn

What is the crisis of identity? What do you mean? What kind of crisis? I’m more confused now.

Response

I wrote about it in previous annotations. I mentioned that Egyptian people emigrated to other countries, and also that the TV and other western values have changed the Egyptian identity that is why now they are in a crisis of identity

Sharon

I think if you can explain better of how the pictures and connections of harassment.

Response

I will. Thank you.

4 annotation. Revised version.

 

Is Veil an effective measure to prevent harassment?

Jessica Villasenor

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For this fourth and last annotation I will continue the thematic in third annotation in order to give complete support to my argument. I already presented the point of view from women and religion perspective, now it is time to inquiry into the men’s reasons.

My principal resource this time is “Clounds in Egypt’s sky”, a pioneer research of the harassment phenomena in Egypt done by The Egyptian Center for Women’s Rights in 2008. It was realized in response to the increase number of complaints in harassment and rapes and the lack of similar studies. Conclusions from this research lead us to the relations between the veil and the crisis of identity in Egypt.

First at all, it is important to mention some statistics. Unemployment in Egypt has been increasing since the 90s, it reached 15% in men younger than 35 in 2012 (Wali, 2011, p. 1). This means a broad segment of male population with no job wich has been known, acording to Stack (2008), as the  waiting generation. However, the unemployment and the economical problems are far from being the main reasons for this situation. This generation “has nothing to fill their lives except TV and the Internet... Egyptians watch American actors do[ing] things that they cannot, like date or have premarital sex…” (Stack, 2008. p.1).  These men see behaviors that they cannot do because it is forbidden in their society.  This contradiction of values has lead to the crisis of identity in Egypt.

The Egyptian Center for Women’s Rights (2008) shows that the common age for harasser is 19-24 years. This age is ¿coincidentally? the same range of age for the majority of unemployment men. The reasons to harass a woman are the belief that harassment works to satisfy the repressed sexual desires, make them feel more masculine, more confident and stronger.

Photo: Egyptian Center for Women's Rights (2008)

The above explained are the reason for men to incur into harassment, however, ¿what is the relation of these factors with the veil? Religious campaigns have claimed, and we may incorrectly assume that the veil might be an effective protective shield for women but the research and the deeds prove that statement to be false. The study reveals that there is no connection between the two facts. The illustration shown here exemplifies it, for example, we may think that a girl dressed like picture 2 or 4 would be a more commonly harassed, but contrarily it is not. The majority of harassed women wear like figure 1.  

The relation between the variables is clear, and the statistical support makes my argument more reliable. It is a pity that not even the veil can help women in Egypt to be safer from harassers, but it  only confirms that the problems is deeper that what we think and the solution for this crisis of identity can only be reached through long terms restructuring society programs.

References

Rights, T. E. (2008). Clouds in Egypt's sky. Cairo: The Egyptian Center for Women's Rights.

Stack, L. (23 de september de 2008). In Egypt, sexual harassment grows. The Christian science monitor.Rertrieved from http:// www.csmonitor.com/World/Middle-East/2008/0923/p07s02-wome.html

Wali, S. (1 de February de 2011). Egypt finds freedom-From sexual harassment. ABC News. Retrieved from http://abcnews.go.com/Blotter/egypt-protest-sexual-.harassment-women-drops-witnesses/story?id=1280463?page=2page=2#. UMNKMHfkLE4

4º annotation

Is Veil an effective measure to prevent harassment?

Jessica Villasenor

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For this fourth and last annotation I will continue the thematic in third annotation in order to give completely support to my argument. I already present the point of view from women and religion perspective to a certain extent, now it is time to inquiry into the men’s reasons.

My principal resource this time is “Clounds in Egypt’s sky”, a pioneer research of the harassment phenomena in Egypt done by The Egyptian Center for Women’s Rights in 2008. It was realized in response to the increase number of complaint in harassment and rapes and the lack of similar studies. Conclusions from this research lead us to the relations between the veil and the crisis of identity in Egypt.

First at all, it is important to mention some statistics. Unemployment in Egypt has been increasing since the 90s, it reached 15% in men younger than 35 in 2012 (Wali, 2011, p. 1). This means a broad segment of male population with no job, however, the unemployment and the economical problems are far from being the main reasons for this situation. As Stack (2008) accurate exemplifies it, this so called waiting generation “has nothing to fill their lives except TV and the Internet... Egyptians watch American actors do[ing] things that they cannot, like date or have premarital sex…” (p. 1).  These men see behavior that they cannot do because it is forbidden in their society.  This contradiction has lead to the crisis of identity in Egypt.

The Egyptian Center for Women’s Rights (2008) shows that the common age for harassers is 19-24 years. This age is the same range of age for the majority of unemployment man (waiting generation). The reasons to harass a woman are the belief that harassment works to satisfy the repressed sexual desires, make them feel more masculine, more confident and stronger.

 

Photo: Egyptian Center for Women's Rights (2008)

The above explained are the reason for men to incur into harassment, however, ¿what is the relation of these factors with the veil? Religious campaigns have claimed, and we may incorrectly assume that the veil may be an effective shield for women, the research and the deeds prove that statement to be false. The study reveals that there is no connection between the two. For example, we may think that a girl dressed like picture 2 or 4 would be a more recurrent target, but contrarily it is not. The majority of harassed women wear like figure 1.  

The relation between the variables is clear, and the statistical support makes my argument more reliable. It is a pity that not even the veil can help women in Egypt to be safer from harassers, but it  only confirms that the problems is deeper that what we think and the solution for this crisis of identity can only be reached through long terms restructuring society programs.

References

Rights, T. E. (2008). Clouds in Egypt's sky. Cairo: The Egyptian Center for Women's Rights.

Stack, L. (23 de september de 2008). In Egypt, sexual harassment grows. The Christian science monitor.Rertrieved from http:// www.csmonitor.com/World/Middle-East/2008/0923/p07s02-wome.html

Wali, S. (1 de February de 2011). Egypt finds freedom-From sexual harassment. ABC News. Retrieved from http://abcnews.go.com/Blotter/egypt-protest-sexual-.harassment-women-drops-witnesses/story?id=1280463?page=2page=2#. UMNKMHfkLE4